Writing Log - Pneumatic Knights

"Pneumatic Knights" Writing Log
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1,173 / 6,000 (19.6%)

Words: 202
Total words: 1,173
Overused word: armor
Gratuitous word: nobbled
Type of scene: Setting up the background and dilemma.
Challenge(s): Making the knights sound cool but a bit creepy and not incredibly cheesy. May have failed.
Which line is it anyways?He would never forget the sight of the hollow suits of armor striding across the battlefield more swiftly than a horse could gallop, their chests glowing, plumes of steam escaping from their visors, scattering flesh-and-blood knights like chaff.
Notes: Urk. Really need to be writing this faster, given that the deadline for submission is in a month or when filled. OTOH, given how long it's been since I did actual writing, I should expect it to take a while to get up to speed.
Other writingy stuff: penthius freewriting, "In Hell, Meatloaf's in the Freezer - Love, Mom: Myth Retelling"